Shoot, I wish I would've written this one this way:"Believe he'll cry?""We'll make him."The "you" in the first line feels wasted, and the "cry" and "try" rhyming bugs me. Too cute.
I agree. CK is averse to rhyming patterns, and this version eliminates that as well as conjures up images of schoolyard bullies with no remorse. And probably without a substantive future.
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Shoot, I wish I would've written this one this way:
"Believe he'll cry?"
"We'll make him."
The "you" in the first line feels wasted, and the "cry" and "try" rhyming bugs me. Too cute.
I agree. CK is averse to rhyming patterns, and this version eliminates that as well as conjures up images of schoolyard bullies with no remorse. And probably without a substantive future.
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